A River of Reveries…
By Rathnashikamani, 24th Apr 2011 | Follow this author
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I wanted to write an enchanting poem.
Then without any inspiration, somehow I tried to put down some words. And I spun them into this free verse which I felt was thrilling.
I don't know how you feel about it.
I have given two different formats to the same poem. I think they give a different effect.
A River ...
A river of reveries
carries
me
to
the seas
of ecstasies.
A loony moon,
in mirrors rippled,
reflects dreams,
the honey streams.
In unknown
lands
I wander
softly in silence;
In mindfolds
I wonder
with shifts in my glance.
Winged is my heart
to flutter among
butterflies
of that fancy flight.
Down into
my sleep’s deep
I glide:
Up those steep slopes
cannot I ride!
Through crowds
of clouds,
the fantasy flutters:
Me to the otherworlds,
the fairy me carries.
The lilt
of this magic
melts all logic:
I was never
as struck
by such an image exotic.
Image credit: Profberger at en.wikipedia , from Wikimedia Commons
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Men are made
Stethoscopic
Of Reveries…
A river of reveries carries me
to the seas of ecstasies.
A loony moon, in mirrors rippled,
reflects dreams, the honey streams.
In unknown lands I wander softly in silence;
In mindfolds I wonder with shifts in my glance.
Winged is my heart to flutter among
butterflies of that fancy flight.
Down into my sleeps deep I glide:
Up those steep slopes cannot I ride!
Through crowds of clouds, the fantasy flutters:
Me to the otherworlds, the fairy me carries.
The lilt of this magic melts all logic:
I was never as struck by such an image exotic.
Image credit: © Marek and Ewa Wojciechowscy / Trips over Poland / CC-BY-SA-3.0, 2.5, 2.0, 1.0 & GDFL , via Wikimedia Commons
Comments
24th Apr 2011 (#)
This is a beautiful poem. I like the effects of the second better. It's a dream on a summer day for me.
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24th Apr 2011 (#)
its beautiful...
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24th Apr 2011 (#)
Just beautiful!
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24th Apr 2011 (#)
Beautiful. The second one is my preference, too.
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24th Apr 2011 (#)
I saw a difference between past and present. The graphics and sentence structure of the second poem, although the words were identicle, allowed me to breeze through it and I enjoyed it very much. The first rendition I had to think about and pay closer attention to what was on the page. Don't know if that makes sense to anyone else, but you felt they gave a different effect and that's how it affected me.
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25th Apr 2011 (#)
Lovely poem, I like the second format as well : )
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25th Apr 2011 (#)
.....Well, I like both, beautiful picture also..
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27th Apr 2011 (#)
I enjoyed both formats too, my friend. What wonderful words you weave into your poetry, and always so heartfelt...
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27th Apr 2011 (#)
I also enjoyed both formats, although I think the first was more liberated, you literally flitted, where the second seemed more contained. Love this, and the idea of doing it in both formats :D
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2nd May 2011 (#)
Wonderful poem.
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3rd Jun 2011 (#)
Made me to remember famous quote--Eventually, all things merge into one, and a river runs through it.
Norman Maclean
Beautiful poem and pics as well.
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12th Jun 2011 (#)
great poem(s). either one is fantastic
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