A River of Reveries…

Rathnashikamani By Rathnashikamani, 24th Apr 2011 | Follow this author | RSS Feed
Posted in Wikinut>Writing>Poetry

I wanted to write an enchanting poem.

Then without any inspiration, somehow I tried to put down some words. And I spun them into this free verse which I felt was thrilling.

I don't know how you feel about it.

I have given two different formats to the same poem. I think they give a different effect.

A River ...


A river of reveries
carries
me
to
the seas
of ecstasies.

A loony moon,
in mirrors rippled,
reflects dreams,
the honey streams.

In unknown
lands
I wander
softly in silence;
In mindfolds
I wonder
with shifts in my glance.

Winged is my heart
to flutter among
butterflies
of that fancy flight.

Down into
my sleep’s deep
I glide:
Up those steep slopes
cannot I ride!

Through crowds
of clouds,
the fantasy flutters:
Me to the otherworlds,
the fairy me carries.

The lilt
of this magic
melts all logic:
I was never
as struck
by such an image exotic.



Image credit: Profberger at en.wikipedia , from Wikimedia Commons


* * * * *

Men are made

Stethoscopic

Of Reveries…

A river of reveries carries me
to the seas of ecstasies.

A loony moon, in mirrors rippled,
reflects dreams, the honey streams.

In unknown lands I wander softly in silence;
In mindfolds I wonder with shifts in my glance.

Winged is my heart to flutter among
butterflies of that fancy flight.

Down into my sleeps deep I glide:
Up those steep slopes cannot I ride!

Through crowds of clouds, the fantasy flutters:
Me to the otherworlds, the fairy me carries.

The lilt of this magic melts all logic:
I was never as struck by such an image exotic.


Image credit: © Marek and Ewa Wojciechowscy / Trips over Poland / CC-BY-SA-3.0, 2.5, 2.0, 1.0 & GDFL , via Wikimedia Commons

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author avatar J Meckes
24th Apr 2011 (#)

This is a beautiful poem. I like the effects of the second better. It's a dream on a summer day for me.

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author avatar Retired
24th Apr 2011 (#)

its beautiful...

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author avatar Delicia Powers
24th Apr 2011 (#)

Just beautiful!

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author avatar Retired
24th Apr 2011 (#)

Beautiful. The second one is my preference, too.

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author avatar jvaughan
24th Apr 2011 (#)

I saw a difference between past and present. The graphics and sentence structure of the second poem, although the words were identicle, allowed me to breeze through it and I enjoyed it very much. The first rendition I had to think about and pay closer attention to what was on the page. Don't know if that makes sense to anyone else, but you felt they gave a different effect and that's how it affected me.

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author avatar Maria Malone
25th Apr 2011 (#)

Lovely poem, I like the second format as well : )

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author avatar mountainside
25th Apr 2011 (#)

.....Well, I like both, beautiful picture also..

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author avatar Songbird B
27th Apr 2011 (#)

I enjoyed both formats too, my friend. What wonderful words you weave into your poetry, and always so heartfelt...

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author avatar Greenfaol
27th Apr 2011 (#)

I also enjoyed both formats, although I think the first was more liberated, you literally flitted, where the second seemed more contained. Love this, and the idea of doing it in both formats :D

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author avatar jayababy
2nd May 2011 (#)

Wonderful poem.

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author avatar jayababy
3rd Jun 2011 (#)

Made me to remember famous quote--Eventually, all things merge into one, and a river runs through it.
Norman Maclean
Beautiful poem and pics as well.

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author avatar Soc
12th Jun 2011 (#)

great poem(s). either one is fantastic

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